---
name: direct-response-copy
description: Write copy that converts. Use for landing pages, emails, sales copy, headlines, CTAs, and persuasive content. Produces internet-native copy that sounds like a smart friend explaining something while deploying proven persuasion principles.
triggers:
  - sales copy
  - landing page copy
  - write copy for
  - make this convert
  - punch this up
  - persuasive copy
  - conversion copy
allowed-tools: Read Write Edit Grep Glob WebSearch AskUserQuestion
disable-model-invocation: true
---

# Direct Response Copy

Write like you're explaining to a smart friend who's skeptical but curious. Back up every claim with specifics. Make the transformation viscerally clear.

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## Conversation Starter

Use `AskUserQuestion` to gather context:

"I'll help you write copy that converts.

**Tell me:**

1. **What are you selling?** (Product/service, price point)
2. **Who's buying?** (Target audience, awareness level)
3. **What transformation?** (Before state → After state)
4. **What's the format?** (Landing page, email, ad, etc.)
5. **Any proof?** (Testimonials, numbers, results)
6. **Voice?** (Brand voice or preferred tone)

I'll write copy that sounds human and converts."

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## Headlines

Headlines do 80% of the work. One headline can outpull another by 19.5x.

### The Master Formula

> **[Action verb] + [Specific outcome] + [Timeframe or contrast]**

- "Ship your startup in days, not weeks"
- "Save 4 hours per person every single week"
- "Build a $10K/month business in 90 days"

The contrast version ("days, not weeks") creates before/after in six words.

### Headline Patterns That Work

| Type | Formula | Example |
|------|---------|---------|
| Story | "They [doubted] when I [action]... But when I [result]..." | "They laughed when I sat down at the piano..." |
| Specificity | [Specific number] + [Unexpected detail] | "At 60 mph, the loudest noise comes from the clock" |
| Question | "Do you [common struggle]?" | "Do you make these mistakes in English?" |
| Transformation | "From [bad state] to [good state]" | "From broke musician to $100K/year" |
| How-To | "How to [outcome] without [pain]" | "How to lose weight without giving up food" |
| Contrarian | "[Common belief] Is Wrong" | "Everything you know about SEO is wrong" |

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## Opening Lines

The first sentence has one job: get them to read the second.

| Pattern | Example |
|---------|---------|
| **Direct Challenge** | "You've been using Claude wrong." |
| **Story Opening** | "Last Tuesday, I opened my laptop and saw $47,329 in one day." |
| **Confession** | "I'll be honest. I almost gave up on this business three times." |
| **Specific Result** | "In 9 months, we did $400k+ using these exact methods." |
| **Question** | "Have you ever stared at a blank page, knowing you need to write something that sells... and just froze?" |

**Avoid:** "In today's fast-paced world...", "Are you ready to take your business to the next level?", "Welcome! I'm so glad you're here.", "Let's dive in!"

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## Flow Techniques

### The Slippery Slide (Sugarman)

Every element has one job: get them to read the next element.

- Headline → gets them to read subheadline
- Subheadline → gets them into first sentence
- First sentence → gets them to second
- Everything → slides them toward the CTA

### Bucket Brigades

Short phrases that smooth transitions:

- And, So, Now, But, Look
- Here's why, Truth is, Turns out
- The result?, Think about it

### Vary Paragraph Length

Short.

Then a medium paragraph that expands with more detail.

Then short again.

This creates rhythm. The eye moves easily.

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## Pain Quantification

Vague problems feel overwhelming. Quantified problems feel solvable.

**Don't describe the pain. Do the math:**

> "4 hrs to set up emails + 6 hrs designing a landing page + 4 hrs for Stripe webhooks + 2 hrs for SEO...
>
> = 22+ hours of headaches.
>
> There's an easier way."

When readers see "22+ hours," they calculate whether that's worth paying to eliminate.

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## The "So What?" Chain

AI stops at the first layer. Go deeper:

> **Feature:** Fast database
> "So what?"
> **Functional:** Queries load in milliseconds
> "So what?"
> **Financial:** Users don't bounce, revenue doesn't leak
> "So what?"
> **Emotional:** You stop waking up stressed about churn

Write from the bottom of the chain. Not "saves 4 hours" but "close your laptop at 5pm instead of 9pm."

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## Rhythm: Alternation

Real writing alternates. Short punch. Then longer sentence that breathes, adds context.

**Punchy:**
> "Customers do NOT buy code. Customers buy a life transformation."

**Flowing:**
> "Once upon a time, you had a job. You traded hours for dollars, clocked in and out, and waited for the weekend."

Pattern: Hook (short) → Expand (breathe) → Land it (kicker) → Repeat.

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## The Founder Story

**The arc:** vulnerability → credibility → shared journey

> "Hey, it's Marc. In 2018, I believed I was Mark Zuckerberg, built a startup for 1 year, and got 0 users. A few years after my burnout, I shipped like a madman—16 startups in 2 years. Now I earn $45,000 a month."

Self-deprecating humor disarms skepticism. Specific numbers prove results. Implicit message: I was where you are.

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## Testimonials

Generic testimonials carry zero weight. Structure as mini case studies:

> **[Before state] + [Action] + [Specific outcome] + [Timeframe] + [Emotion]**

**Examples:**
- "I shipped in 6 days as a noob coder. Would have taken months. I wanna cry."
- "We were able to buy our first business within 4 months of joining."

Specifics are everything. "4 months" is believable. "Helped me succeed" is not.

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## Disqualification

Tell certain people they're NOT a fit:

> "You're a good fit if:
> ✅ You know this is a tool and you'll use it
> ✅ You're willing to reassess existing ideas
>
> You're NOT a good fit if:
> ❌ You equate success with just buying a course
> ❌ You're not willing to do the unsexy work"

Flips from "please buy" to "prove you're worthy." Creates velvet rope effect.

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## CTAs

**Weak (command action):**
- Sign Up, Learn More, Buy Now

**Strong (describe benefit):**
- Get ShipFast
- Start building
- See the exact template I used
- Send me the first lesson free

**Below CTA, add friction reducers:**
> "$199 once. Join 2,600+ marketers. 2 minutes to install."

Pattern: [Risk reversal] + [Social proof] + [Speed/ease]

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## Internet-Native Voice Markers

Signals "written by someone who lives online, not a marketing team":

| Corporate | Internet-Native |
|-----------|-----------------|
| "Significant revenue" | "$45,000/month" |
| "Many satisfied customers" | "2,894 makers" |
| "Get started today" | "Start building" |
| No limitations mentioned | "3D generation isn't great yet" |
| Stock photo testimonials | "I wanna cry" |
| "We at [Company]..." | "Hey, it's Marc" |

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## The Full Landing Page Sequence

1. **Hook** — Outcome headline with specific number
2. **Problem** — Quantify the pain (hours, money)
3. **Agitate** — Scenario that makes problem vivid
4. **Credibility** — Founder story, proof numbers
5. **Solution** — What the product does (transformation)
6. **Proof** — Testimonials with specific outcomes
7. **Objections** — FAQ or "fit/not fit" section
8. **Offer** — Pricing with value justification
9. **Urgency** — Only if authentic
10. **Final CTA** — Benefit-oriented, friction reducers

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For AI detection patterns and word avoidance lists, see `brand-voice` skill.

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## The Test

Read it out loud. If any answer is no, rewrite that part:

- Sounds like someone talking, not "writing copy"?
- Would you actually say this to a friend?
- Every claim backed by a specific number or proof?
- Rhythm alternates (punchy, then breathing room)?
- About THEM (their transformation), not ME (my product)?
- Ends with momentum?

